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Olympic Outreach — Preview Review Notes

This page is a PREVIEW built by the sales-page pipeline on 2026-08-19. It is not published and must not be until every blocker below is resolved by Tim. The adversarial gauntlet (10 personas + red team, 2 cycles) passed conditionally: the copy is done, but several facts and commitments are placeholders that only Tim can supply or sign.

Gauntlet result: 2 cycles · overall 3.35 → 4.08 · would-buy 10/10 (track-record variant A) / 6/10 (variant B) · would-email 10/10 · MECLABS C = 35 → 50 · skim audit 7/7 after post-cycle bolding

Publish blockers

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Verify the routes against real USPS data

The page claims two alternating routes (~10,000 mailboxes each, ~20,000 unique households/year, ~6 touches per household). Route B's count is a placeholder, and the old site mockup listed Lakewood on Route B, which is in Pierce County; three gauntlet personas flagged that as locally disqualifying, so the preview says 'Tumwater and Lacey' pending truth. Publish the actual USPS route IDs, per-route counts, and a coverage map (four minutes in the USPS EDDM tool). All year-math on the page depends on this.

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Pick the track-record variant

Section 'What I can prove today' has a required choice: Variant A (state how many local editions have mailed, with USPS confirmations available) or Variant B (own pre-launch status and sell founding-advertiser slots with a locked founding rate). The old site mockup's archive shows Nov 2025–Mar 2026 editions but with placeholder images, so actual history is unverified. The gauntlet passes 10/10 under A and 6/10 under B; either is publishable, ambiguity is not.

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Sign off on the commitments the copy prints

The page promises, in Tim's voice: (1) if what prints differs from the approved proof, the fix plus the next mailing is free; (2) once a month's card locks it mails on schedule, full or not; (3) a one-page agreement naming each advertiser's category exclusivity in writing; (4) two proof revision rounds; (5) USPS processing confirmation shared with every advertiser after every mailing; (6) 72-hour category hold; (7) the three-mailing fair-test framing. Each needs to be a real business policy before publish, and (1)–(3) should be written into the actual agreement.

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Real contact details

Email and phone are placeholders. The old mockup used info@ AND hello@olympicoutreach.com plus a fictional 555 number. Pick one email, one real phone.

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Next mailing month and lock deadline

The CTA references {{NEXT_MAILING_MONTH}} and {{DEADLINE_DATE}}. The mockup's 'April 2026' is long stale (it is August 2026).

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Real photos: the card and Tim

Hero must be a photo of a genuinely printed card (all ten personas: a mockup render here kills the page; several would treat it as proof the product doesn't exist). Origin section needs a photo of Tim holding the card somewhere recognizably Olympia. Also fill {{TIM_LOCAL_DETAIL}} with one checkable, slightly boring personal line (a street, a number of years, a named favorite spot); vague warmth here does more harm than the empty slot.

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Tier dimensions and sample ads

Pricing shows a to-scale card diagram that is currently illustrative. Supply the real ad dimensions per tier and 2–3 real designed ads (including one Starter-size). Three personas rated buying 'a size described by adjectives' a critical blocker.

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Category availability data

The grid ships neutral ('ask about yours'). Only switch on live taken/open status once 4+ categories are genuinely filled; a grid showing sixteen open slots advertises zero customers louder than any missing testimonial.

Decisions needed

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Billing terms

FAQ has a {{BILLING_TERMS}} placeholder: invoice vs card-on-file, and when the charge happens relative to slot lock.

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Tier renamed: 'Coupon Only' → 'Starter'

The page trashes coupon envelope packs and then the old pricing named its cheap tier 'Coupon Only'; two personas flagged the collision, so the page says 'Starter (a coupon-style spot)'. Approve or revert, and update the main site to match whichever wins.

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Brand name and pricing source

Page uses 'Olympic Outreach' (the newer site mockup) over the business bible's 'Olympia Community Outreach', and the site's 4-tier pricing ($900/$500/$275/$130) over the bible's flat $600. Confirm both calls.

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Sources for the stats

Response-rate and preference figures currently cite industry studies collected in 9x12-marketing-research.md (DRMG, Darwill, PostcardMania, USPS). The Analytical persona will check these links; upgrading to the primary ANA/DMA response-rate report would make the footer bulletproof.

Recommendations

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Replace the bare mailto with a tiny form

Red team's #1 friction finding: owners read this at 10 PM and stall on a blank compose window. A two-field category-check form (business type + contact) posting to a Worker would convert meaningfully better. Also consider: a 12-month rate lock for continuous advertisers (kills the 'price hike in month seven' anxiety), and a response-time standard written into the agreement.

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Collect testimonials after the next mailing

Two reserved testimonial cards are on the page with honest 'no fake reviews' microcopy (which the gauntlet scored as a trust asset). Business bible Part 7, days 26–30 covers collection. Specific results beat praise.